Working on the beginning of a story and want to get opinions on whether or not it has potential.

Working Title: Staves
Genre: Fantasy
Premise: A ritual must be done to renew the world and keep it from dying. Two bands of people are in a battle over whether or not to complete the ritual or let the world die. Into the cracks falls a mortal girl who happened to be in the right place at the right time.

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Input is very much appreciated.